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Post by Jansina on May 29, 2012 19:53:26 GMT -6
The opening line of your story can draw in a reader. The opening lines of your chapters or even of your paragraphs can keep them reading. Whichever you're working on, bring it here. We'll let you know if it draws us in or needs some work.
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Post by Catherine on Jun 3, 2012 7:48:25 GMT -6
Here's the opening lines to my NaNo story
The sun was setting in the pale pink sky on that day. Inside the house sat a family eating dinner, unaware that this day would forever change their lives.
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Juliet
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Life is way too short. Smile while you still have teeth.
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Post by Juliet on Jun 3, 2012 17:08:26 GMT -6
The opening lines of my Camp Nano story:
The repetitive beeping of the heart monitors was all that could be heard in the large laboratory. The four unconscious humans breathed in unison, each trembling from the chemicals being injected into them. This was the day the world changed, it would never be the same again.
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Post by Catherine on Jun 3, 2012 17:35:52 GMT -6
Juliet that's awesome! I REALLY want to read more!!
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Post by Gina on Jun 3, 2012 22:47:27 GMT -6
Great job, girls! I wonder what will happen next!
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Post by Emilie on Jun 3, 2012 23:43:47 GMT -6
Whoa, Juliet! That was really good! I hope you post this story after Camp NaNo's finished. I really liked yours, Catherine! These are the first few sentences from my Camp NaNo story from last year. I didn't finish this one, but I nearly ditched the one I'm working on this year for this one. Freya tucked the last of the fantasy DVD’s away carefully into the false bottom of her pants drawer. If the searchers found the DVD’s, they would confiscate and destroy them and she’d have to pay a fine for every single one found in her possession. The fine would be heavy, seeing as the whole false bottom was covered with the forbidden genre.
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Post by Twinkle on Jun 4, 2012 6:54:56 GMT -6
I really like those girls Here are the first two lines from my Camp NaNo story this year. As he ran through the darkening and deserted streets Gabriel heard the sound of several feet running after him. Weaving his way through the maze of streets he tried to lose them but the sound of running feet continued to follow him.
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Post by beckie on Jun 4, 2012 9:44:44 GMT -6
Mine isn't as good as yours Juliet!! I am so looking forward to reading more of yours so you better post it once your done! these are the first two sentences of mine: Joy Hailey, Emilie Cherveaux, and Katherine Lark stood in front of Emilie’s mom one sunny California day in the Cherveaux kitchen, “Mommy, please can we go on a camping trip?” Mrs Cherveaux had always found it hard to refuse her only daughter, also because she was the youngest of eight; all were boys except for her.
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Juliet
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Life is way too short. Smile while you still have teeth.
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Post by Juliet on Jun 4, 2012 14:08:12 GMT -6
Thank you, everyone!! I want to read more of that, Beckie!!
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Post by Twinkle on Aug 21, 2012 13:07:23 GMT -6
here are two possible opening lines for a short story that I am going to be writing.
The day of my accident is a day that I will never forget. It all started one day after football practice when I was walking home with my best friend Felix Cameron Stolberg, though he just wants everyone to call him Felix.
The day if my accident is a day that I will never be able to forget. Now you are wondering what sort of accident it was so let me start at the very beginning.
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Sallie
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"The Light shines in the darkness, and the darkness shall not overcome It."
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Post by Sallie on Aug 21, 2012 18:40:51 GMT -6
This is the beginning of a story I'm writing.
I've known Dominic Hedger for many years; ever since we were in Kindergarten together. We used to play together, and when we got older, talk together. I admired him, and at one point I even had a crush on him. But this is his story, not mine, and it's a story of strength, not romance.
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